Here is the improvised version of the poem mentioned in my first post. This was published in our college magazine released in the year 2000. I altered the poem to make it look more mature in terms of relevance of content and choice of words, but am not sure if I really succeeded or not! So, you have to tell me what you feel! Which of the two is better?
I hope you won't mind the minor spelling errors and the playful comments of the editors of the college magazine, because it is ought to be that way!
Yours Always Musically,