Improvised version published in 2000!

Dear Friends,

Here is the improvised version of the poem mentioned in my first post. This was published in our college magazine released in the year 2000. I altered the poem to make it look more mature in terms of relevance of content and choice of words, but am not sure if I really succeeded or not! So, you have to tell me what you feel! Which of the two is better?



I hope you won't mind the minor spelling errors and the playful comments of the editors of the college magazine, because it is ought to be that way!

Yours Always Musically,
Vijay.